New Short Story opener

For those who haven’t noticed the twitter entry, Ordo Lupus has been accepted for publication by creatspace.

How is this for a short story opener. Is it worth pursuing?

“God’s body man, giveth me the 4th gear! Now!”
“Fucking press the damned clutch you madman!” I shouted back over the reverberating din of the V8 Chevy block, attempting some humility and knowing ‘damned’ was the only swear-word King Henry VIII would actually acknowledge.
The large pallid face broke into a toothy grin. “Raymond. You are an impertinent – what is the modern phrase – jackass, but I like you!” His big foot, somewhat incongruously contained in a size 14 Nike trainer, pressed clumsily down on the accelerator and I slammed the gearstick into 4th. A moment later the King, hunched over the royal Sparco steering wheel, turned the car to the left, and as, dirt spurting from the drifting rear wheels, we emerged from the turn, I realised we were actually going to finish in third place. Not yet a win, but for a man new, not only to the sport, but to the century, it was not a bad effort. Henry roared his approval as we crossed the line.

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4 thoughts on “New Short Story opener

  1. i kinda like it in principal, but there's no way Henry VIII's rotund stature could fit into a bucket seat…

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  2. I know what you mean about the recaro seats. Have to think about that one.

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  3. What is this – Time Travel, Steampunk or Alternative Reality?You forgot to mention the greensleeves to go with the nikes – Lol!You into heavy metal these days with the Harleys and Chevies?Strange – my new story tells of a '52 Chevy!

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