OK all the readers who are going to complete my draft have completed it and I have all the feedback. It makes for very interesting reading. The curious thing – which I didn’t expect but probably should have, is that they all completely disagree.
While one person thinks that one chapter or section is boring, for another it is their favourite part. This makes it quite difficult to do any editing at all although there were some areas that all felt could be improved. A secondary problem arose from that though:
For instance one passage that several felt was really extraneous I deleted, and then did a kind of flash-back just for the vital details of that section – like a summary. But then people said it sounded like I was rushing on to the next bit. Even worse, one reader said that for the next section there then wasn’t enough background so that I even contemplated putting the original section back in.
I am going to have to let it all sink in and then come to an overall picture of how it should be.
In the mean time work continues on the new story – the sci-fi one, but slowly. I often find myself writing just a paragraph or so in an evening and then deciding its no good anyway. This is often because I am looking for the ‘tone’ of the story. I came up with a lovely phrase last night and until that point I had thought that I wanted to write something a little more poetic than the last story; something beautiful. But then the next phrase was equally good and yet had a trashy feel. I then had to think ‘well am I writing something beautiful or Raymond Chandler?’
It has caused me to pause and think. If one is writing something that you want to be poetic and beautiful, can you then include a phrase that is very descriptive but of something that is ugly?