The Jesus Monster (also known as The Quiet)

Synopsis

When a deadly virus called UO12 sweeps the world, killing nearly all of humanity by compelling infected people toward self-sacrificial euphoria until they die, a priest and his companion Ed steal a plane and crash-land near the remote Australian outback village of Kintore, where a small Aboriginal community struggles to survive. The priest, near death, warns the villagers about the virus before dying by his own hand. As the infection spreads through Kintore, the community fractures — a power struggle erupts, people die by violence and self-destruction, and one by one the villagers succumb.

This new screen play was submitted to Greenlight Coverage and received the scores below.

The Jesus Monster is free as part of Inchoate: (Short Stories Volume I). Go to its dedicated page using the menu for links.

Please Note: The Jesus Monster plot deals with difficult and complex subject matter. I only discovered after submission to Greenlight that their reviewer is AI. The score below seems to reflect the difficulty an AI has inferring virus and human behaviours from subtle clues. I am sure the screenplay will receive a higher score from a human reviewer.

Greelight Criteria

Originality, Character Development, Plot Construction, Dialogue, Emotional Engagement, and Theme/Message.

Greenlight Scores

Overall score – 77%

Verdict – Consider

Criteria	Score (out of 10)	Comments
Originality	7.5	The central concept—a virus that feeds on altruistic thought and can only be defeated through evil acts—is genuinely inventive and philosophically provocative.
Plot Construction	6.0	The story follows a clear three-act structure: arrival of the virus news, community breakdown, and Ken’s final desperate act to save Samantha.
Dialogue	5.0	The dialogue serves its functional purpose and occasionally captures authentic Australian/Aboriginal speech patterns (“ay,” “gubba,” “brothas”).
Character Development	5.5	Ken is the most developed character, with his “fixer” trait consistently explored and challenged throughout.
Emotional Engagement	6.0	Gemima’s death scene is genuinely moving, and Ken’s helplessness throughout creates sustained pathos.
Theme and Message	6.5	The screenplay wrestles with substantial themes: the paradox of goodness becoming destructive, the limits of “fixing” others, community versus individual survival, and the nature of sacrifice.
Overall Rating	6.2	This screenplay presents a genuinely original premise with strong thematic ambitions set in an underrepresented community,

Synopsis

When a deadly virus called UO12 sweeps the world, killing nearly all of humanity by compelling infected people toward self-sacrificial euphoria until they die, a priest and his companion Ed steal a plane and crash-land near the remote Australian outback village of Kintore, where a small Aboriginal community struggles to survive. The priest, near death, warns the villagers about the virus before dying by his own hand. As the infection spreads through Kintore, the community fractures — a power struggle erupts, people die by violence and self-destruction, and one by one the villagers succumb.