I have completed the penultimate edit of Iron II. It was a bit of an epic. I was determined to get it down from 104,000 words to less than 100,000. Every time I cut out chunks it still seemed the same length. I don’t know how that was possible. I cut out a whole chapter and it was still 104,000 words long. Admittedly I had to add some stuff back in to make the story flow and keep the continuity. The last 10 words took 2 hours, but it is now 99,998 words long. Hope to publish in about a month.
I have also rewritten the ending of Ordo Lupus II, and I think it’s much better. It also resulted in a story 30,000 words shorter. At 80,000 words, it could be my shortest yet. It wasn’t really the length that bothered me, but that the original climax followed by a second climax didn’t seem to work: the momentum was lost somewhere. Now, I think it works really well. Hope to publish this one later this year.
I have finally started on Iron III which will revolve totally around Jake Nanden again and have many more battles. I see Iron II now as the eye of the storm in the flow of the trilogy.
I am already making tentative steps towards writing a very serious novel which I hope will break a few boundaries. It will certainly be ‘adults only’.
I also am developing an outline for a story set in WWII and basically revolving around aircraft. In Ordo Lupus there was a raid on Holland in WWII, and I really enjoyed writing it. I had good feedback from readers who like that sort of thing, but other readers found it boring. So it would nice to try a book for those that might enjoy it. Of course there is a risk I am trying too many genres and I might lose credibility.
I am hoping to publish Iron II: Unknown Place, Unknown Universe in March/April after an extensive rewrite. I have taken out a Chapter’s equivalent in the middle of the book, added something new to the final battle (which will tie in with Book III) and generally tidied up the dialogue, adding idioms for the three youngsters to make their individual speech-patterns more distinct. It’s the first time I have written a story with three lead characters and it’s quite a challenge making speech clear without writing ‘he said’ and ‘she said’ all over the place.
I am also thinking about the plot for Iron III – which I think will take place predominantly in space, and several other stories which I have in mind.
My review in the Science Fiction and Fantasy South Africa group didn’t materialise (yet?) but I am hoping one will appear For Ordo Lupus and the Temple Gate soon on Big Al’s Blog.
Ordo Lupus and the Temple Gate Paperback is now out as a Second Edition with the same cover as the e-book.
It’s been a long time, I know, since the last update. To be honest, I have been heavily engrossed in writing the above manuscript. It’s taken up just about every minute of my spare time. It’s going to be worth it though. I think it’s much more taught than Ordo Lupus I and has a really meaty climax. It still has The Serpent in it but explores the werewolf thing a lot further. The title is a secret: it’s one of those titles that you think, ‘Hey, somebody must have used that before’, and then you realise that they haven’t. So I am not going to tell you in case somebody nicks it.
I also went to the Tower of London last weekend. If you haven’t ever been or haven’t been for a long time (like me) then I thoroughly recommend it. Of course I am fascinated by the 11th, 12th and 13th century anyway but it has a tremendous atmosphere. The White Tower is especially good – with rows of lovely Norman oak beams and huge fireplaces – all original. Big windows too for the day. It’s also surprisingly snug. I think William must have had a great time living there.
They have a few actors dotted about doing their stuff in period costume and I chatted to a lady doing her crocheting. I haven’t a clue what she was talking about! She said something about her husband having been murdered (well, this is the Tower of London!) but the more I tried to talk, the more convoluted her story became. Anyway it was a laugh and the tourists around me seemed quite intrigued.
Contrary to rumour, it’s not to difficult to get in: I went at about 2pm on a Saturday and I queued for about 10 mins for ticket. I didn’t queue at all to get into the Tower. I took hundreds of photos too.
Cliff Robertson has died. I don’t know how at the moment. His website is down but I am going to send our little group’s condolences to him via his Press Agent – when I can find his address. It will probably be swamped in the welter of messages from other people but it’s the best I can do.
I only had the briefest of correspondences with him but I was struck by how open, warm and friendly he was. He asked me to go to his house to conduct an interview ‘Mano a Mano’ but it wasn’t the right time for me. I did feel also that he was possibly not well by some of the things he said. It’s sad I won’t now have the chance to talk to him but at least we have some answers to questions about 633 Squadron.
Cliff, if you are watching or listening, you will be missed.
Here are the results. Looks like a draw between Bullitt and Matrix Reloaded.
19 Bullitt
19 Matrix Unloaded
16 Mad Max II the truck at the end
10 smokey and the bandit
9 Blues Brothers
9 The Italian Job
8 Batman Begins
7 Boat Chase in Live and Let Die
7 Mad Max Continue reading “Best Film Car Chase Vote – Results”→
Here is my vote for the best Vehicle Chase (as usual in reverse pts order – 10 pts for best)
10 Bullitt
9 The Italian Job
8 Mad Max II the truck at the end
7 Boat Chase in Live and Let Die
6 Gone is 60 Seconds remake
5 Gone is 60 Seconds original
4 The French Connection
3 Diamonds are Forever
2 Vanishing Point
1 Duel
Sort of Cross of Iron meets Blade Runner. Thanks to Ash for a brilliant cover and Ash, Gary and Lorna for reading it.
Here is the blurb:
Jake Nanden is a man scared of his own soul.
It’s been over ten years since Gary Enquine sent my friend Przeltski to a certain death. Not one day has gone by without the memories of that battle prowling my mind like a waking nightmare. Many times I have woken in a cold-sweat thinking about it. I will not rest – can not rest until Gary Enquine has been brought to justice and been forced to pay for his cowardice. Ten years; its a long time but I can be patient. 2101, Feb 3. 1.
Major Jake Nanden is a soldier so well decorated that his fame reaches far beyond the desolate moon Io where he is stationed. His victories in the Jupiter Wars are hollow though, for he is a man scared of his own soul. Seeking vengeance for the death of a friend ten long years ago, he has pursued his own personal demons with an almost religious fervour through life and through battle. But deeply buried memories will turn his world upside down and reveal just how fragile life and beautiful the human spirit can be.
From the Author
One off the things that inspired me to write Too Bright the Sun was the concept of the Stanford Torus and concept paintings of it like this one here:
Stanford Torus Visualisation
In the late 1960s and early 1970s NASA was asked by the US Government to explore ways of sending an ‘ark’ through space. Here is their viability report. They were terrified of the possible consequences of all-out nuclear war and wanted to assure the survival of at least some Americans, even if they had to be sent out into space. NASA enlisted the help of experts from all disciplines and came up with a rotating space station that could accommodate up to 100,000 people – the minimum number felt necessary for a healthy isolated community. They also found that a local familiar landmark of some size would help the colony to overcome the isolation of space. The answer seemed to be the Stanford Torus, a slowly spinning hollow doughnut shaped ring which would give artificial gravity and enough space to support the required number of people and landmarks such as rivers and mini Golden Gate Bridges. This is where my idea for the space station J5 came from for Too Bright the Sun.
High resolution images of the MCS are available in the deluxe edition of The War for Iron: Element of Civilization: Boxed Set.
Another subject I explore though not in much detail is the Oedipus Complex. Jake has two women in his life, one being Jena. His military psychologist, she has tremendous power over him, but he feels she treats him like a lab rat, giving him coplex mazes to navigate. However, she also has two lovers, the other being Lincoln, rich and highly influential. Jake feels threatened and through his insecurity about his origin (test tube) and state of mind, he has developed an Oedipal relationship with her ie she has become his ‘Mother.’ Like all sons, he needs her and needs to win her approval but failing this attempts to control and dominate her, making demands she cannot satisfy (though Jena’s intentions are honourable and she doesn’t deliberately cultivate his mother complex to exploit him, as many women do). His impatience leads to her rejecting him in favour of Lincoln, but fortunately for him he has much more understanding and ‘equal’ friend in space pilot Katie. In my opinion, too many men are too dependent on their mothers (I don’t have a strong attachment to mine, so I feel I know what I’m talking about here) and become impatient, demanding, jealous and possessive in relationships (though easy to manipulate lol).
Just noticed this – if you look at the Wikipedia entry for the A-12 Oxcart – predecessor to the SR-17 Blackbird – you will see that it says the original test pilot was Bissell and the test pilot of the first SR-71 was a Gilliland in 1964. Now if you are as familiar with the 1964 film 633 Squadron as I am (see my Questionnaire for Cliff Robertson – Cliff’s Response blog for 24 November 2010) you will know very well that Roy Grant’s navigator for one mission is a Bissell and that another pilot is called Gillibrand. Could this be coincidence? It seems even less likely when you realise that the director Walter Grauman was a combat crewman in a B-25 during WWII and mad-keen on aircraft. I wonder if he knew all about the Oxcart programme even then?
I am continuing with the final edit and spell-check of Too Bright the Sun so that I can publish in July.