The World is Broken: Who Can Find the Key?

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There is a RIP in space and time. Om and Bri are trapped. All humanity; wiped out after seven cycles of destruction, Unless Om and Bri can unite to find the source of the rip.

A curtain of rainbow light shimmers and two people see their lives shift, in this tense, epic thriller. Om and Bri gradually become aware that they have met before – in previous lives. They begin to recall a mission that started with the discovery of Iron in ancient Atlantis. A gravitational rip was triggered by the Ischians, and water became impure, causing the gradual loss of memory and the Cup, a grail to hold the Holy blood of the first tree.

The blind Seer predicts that Earth’s health will never be restored until the Cup, the Holy Grail of legend, has been restored.

It’s their last life, their last chance. Om and Bri must find their way back through the rip to Atlantis, and to the cave where the last Val-yr, vampire priests, wait.

But the Cup needs a Key.

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How to Write a Good Book – Post 5. Varying the Pace

pen5So you have your plot of Rudolph’s adventures all worked out and you know where the climax and twist will be. Now you are considering writing the climax and want to know how to show tension when Rudolph can’t get the tractor down a narrow alleyway, or gets stuck in a snowdrift. So how do you show the tension?

It’s not as easy as you might think!

Action Words and Expletives

The first rule is to use more action words when you are writing action sequences. These are words like ‘ripped,’ ‘spun,’ ‘yelled,’ ‘wrenched,’ and ‘panted.’

Here is an example. See how this sentence sounds quite calm.

– He knew he needed to get through the door. He put down the axe and walked up to the door. He pulled on the handle and it opened. He went thought the opening and all was well.

That definitely lacks tension. Let’s try it again:

– He had to get through the door. He only had seconds left! He threw his axe down, spun round and leaped toward the door. Grabbing the handle, he pulled and pulled but the door wouldn’t budge. Using all his strength, he gave it one last almighty heave and wrenched the door open. The wood cracked and splintered as the lock broke, and he was through!
“What’s the problem Rudolph?” Santa yelled.
“The door! It’s bloody stuck!”

Okay, so I went a bit over the top there; it’s twice as long. But it’s much more exciting.

Notice the use of words like ‘grabbing,’ ‘cracked.’

Also notice saying ‘had to’ instead of ‘knew he needed to.’ Forget about considered thought in tight situations. People just act and think later when they are desperate. This is one place where we definitely don’t need to know what the hero is thinking.

Also note the use of an expletive (swear word) by Rudolph. You might not want to use expletives in your writing but it’s a fact that people swear a lot when under pressure. Leave swear words out and you risk losing realism.

Short Sentences

For the last reason above, short sentences are good in action sequences. We want simple action, and short sentences tend to increase the pace.

Time

Another trick is to use time. If the hero is not only fighting against an evil adversary or obstinate door, but also against the clock, this will dramatically increase tension.

I used this a great deal in Ordo Lupus and the Temple Gate.

Adversity or Obstacles

Elements of adversity of obstacle can also add tension. In the example above the door wouldn’t open easily and he had to wrench it open. Small accidents can also increase tension. He needs a key to unlock the door but he drops it, as people do when tense or in a hurry. Both accidents and obstacles also prolong the tension, which also helps create tension.

Use of Commas

The use of less commas during action sequences can increase tension, but this is a technique not all authors employ. If you try it, you still need to observe good grammar rules.

A Word of Warning about Length of Description

As you probably noticed in my example above, quite often action sequences can make the prose longer. For this reason, you will need to allow a bit more space for describing action, perhaps as much as 50% more space. But on the other hand, if you use short sentences carefully and avoid any description of inner feeling, you can sometimes keep the prose in action scenes as short as elsewhere.

Slowing the Pace

It may sound crazy, but sometimes you will want to slow the pace!

You can’t have climactic scenes throughout the whole book. This would be exhausting to read, and would ignore the whole point of climaxes. But you may want more than one climax. In The Devil’s Own Dice I knew there would be a big battle in the middle of the story. Inevitably this has to be very tense and a climax of some sort. But I didn’t want it to be the final climax. This made things tricky. I got round it by making the lead up to the battle quite leisurely and keeping the tension high afterwards. I also had a strong ‘insight’ scene after the battle, so that we see a previous love affair in detail and how it affected the main character. This kept the pace up, because of the tension of an affair, but also allowed the reader a bit of a contrast to battle. I had to make sure the final climax was even more exciting, but on the whole I think the reader feels they got a bonus, rather than a let down

Using Chapter Breaks and Scene Switching

I put these 2 factors together because they sometimes amount to the same thing.

Because you will want the climax somewhere near the end of the book, each chapter should, on the whole, be more gripping than the last. This drags the reader along and won’t let them put the book down. For this reason, you should normally end each chapter on a cliff-hanger. That is, they should either be just about to learn something, or have just seen some action but not know the outcome. This will make the reader want to turn the next page.

If the book has a large cast and a complex arena of action such as the invasion of Earth in my science fiction book Worlds Like Dust, you might try switching between different areas of action, either at section breaks or chapter breaks, rather than trying to describe it all simultaneously. Allowing yourself to describe one piece of action completely before switching to another increases tension, because the reader is wondering in the back of their mind what has happened to so-and-so in the other scene. Tolkien does this brilliantly in Lord of the Rings. You must handle continuity very carefully when you do this.

So, in conclusion, to vary pace, use:

  1. Action Words and Expletives
  2. Short Sentences
  3. Time
  4. Adversity or Obstacles
  5. Reduced Number of Commas
  6. Chapter Breaks and Scene Switching

Join me for the final part of this series 6. Editing in two weeks’ time.

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欧尔狼疮和寺庙门中国语言版本现已推出!

神秘惊悚欧尔狼疮和寺庙门中国版

神秘惊悚欧尔狼疮和寺庙门中国版

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I am delighted to announce that Ordo Lupus and the Temple Gate is now available in Chinese! Unless you read Chinese, you won’t want to read the rest of this post!

这个神秘的惊悚片可在以下网站:

http://www.amazon.cn/dp/B019OL9E6G
http://www.pubu.com.tw/ebook/61681
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内容介绍
为什么一个声名狼藉的宗教暗杀组织要保他的命?男主人公亲眼目睹爱女被卷入一场血腥谋杀,女儿被遗弃的幼小尸体破碎扭曲,死状惨烈。身为退隐的军情六处特工,他决定找出女儿惨死的真相,却陷入了警方和妻子的怀疑。拥有预见能力的他为了洗清自己的罪名展开了探索之旅。此时的他只有一名身为历史学家、现代的医院骑士团成员的朋友,在这唯一朋友的帮助下,他踏上了一条惊心动魄的拯救之路,却发现自己痛恨的宗教组织暗中保护自己……神秘学,超自然,悬疑,狼人,吸血鬼,幽默,超能力,情节生动。喜爱作家丹·布朗神秘历史感风格的作者一定会爱上这本神秘学小说——一个描述黑暗力量、情节惊心动魄的故事!
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अमेज़न भारत पर 24 घंटे के लिए नि: शुल्क मनोगत थ्रिलर!

Ordo Lupus and the Temple Gate cover

Ordo Lupus and the Temple Gate cover


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“” रोमांचक पढ़ें ‘दा विंची कोड के प्रशंसक मजा आएगा ”
आसानी से दस फीट ऊंची है, नाग के तराजू iridescently झिलमिलाता है, और अपनी आंखों बेचैन आग के गड्ढे जल रहा है, कई रंग के थे।
इस राक्षस के तराजू भी पुरुषों और महिलाओं के रूपों थे, पीड़ा में कर्ल करवाने, और कभी कभी एक प्रार्थना में अपने हथियार फेंक देना होगा।
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“अगर के रूप में जला दिया जा रहा है? उबला हुआ जा रहा है, तो के रूप में?”

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Free Occult Thriller for Xmas: Ordo Lupus and the Temple Gate

Ordo Lupus and the Temple Gate

Ordo Lupus and the Temple Gate

To celebrate what I hope will be a wonderful Christmas for my readers, Ordo Lupus and the Temple Gate – Second Edition, featuring shifter mythology (vampires and werewolves) will be free from 23-27 December on Amazon: http://bit.ly/1gWteFq

Hope you enjoy it! Tell your friends.

Operation Peppermint – The Allied Fear of Radiological Warfare in WW2

December Radio cover

December Radio cover

Operation Peppermint
The hazards posed to nuclear veterans – whether personnel (including down wind civilians) were present at Trinity, Hiroshima and Nagasaki (included the targeted civilians) or at nuclear test areas thereafter – were well known prior to the formation of Manhattan Project. Indeed, radiation sickness had been fully described by medical authorities in Europe and the US in the 1930s. The radium dial painters – their illnesses and suffering – were tracked by US authorities from the 1920s until the last worker died in the 1990s. (Being the first human radiation experiment conducted without victim permission.) Many such workers suffered decades of ill health, many died in the 20s and 30s.

Source: http://ow.ly/uNgUp

Read more about WWII radiation experiments, including the project to build and detonate and Nazi Atomic Bomb in my forthcoming book: December Radio, to be published around 29 January 2016 by A-Argus.

Hunting Hitler
I just wanted to mention the excellent new History channel series Hunting Hitler. In short, last year the FBI released their own secret files detailing their attempts to locate Adolf Hitler after WWII. They did not believe the Russian story that Hitler and Eva Braun’s body had been burned in the Reich Chancellery garden and, to be fair, there has never been any solid evidence to support this claim.

It is well known that Hitler’s last public appearance was on 20 April 1945 and the FBI files show that 10 aircraft took off from Templehof airport (Berlin’s main airport) on the 21 April, one day later. What is more the manifests show many senior Nazis to be on board and also Hitler’s personal luggage. A few aircraft were shot down but at least one made it to the Baltic coast, where a U-boat could have been waiting. One other is rumoured to have landed in Spain (of course neutral and sympathetic to Hitler) although the radio messages were garbled on this matter.

The programme’s investigators used modern techniques starting with Means, Motive and Opportunity to suggest that Hitler could have made it at least as far as the nearest underground station to Templehoff on the 21 April. They then managed to locate a blocked up tunnel in hte basement of the airport which led toward the nearest underground station. They ended in Berlin with using hand held Ground Penetration Radar to locate a hollow wall (covering a blocked up tunnel?) precisely where they expected the tunnel to emerge.

In Spain they found further evidence that Nazi’s were active in a port called Vigo, in North West Spain, only a short distance from Franco’s personal retreat. A strange gantry for loading tungsten, of which the area is a major producer, remains next to the bridge and can be clearly seen on Google Earth. It could well serve to load raw materials onto submarines. Eye-witnesses talk of seeing U-boats docking for more than 3 months after hostilities ended, and it is well known that 46 U-boats were never accounted for.

Another team is attempting to locate a U-boat off the coast of Argentina, where a local Nazi had wool production company and owned a private bank. Eye witnesses report seeing a U-boat scuttled in the area in the summer of 1945.

Now, while all this is new and exciting and I have to admit, compelling given that Hitler was not a man to ‘give up’ easily, I have some reservations about this programme so far.

  • Firstly, Hitler didn’t kill himself (according to eye-witness accounts) until 30 April, almost ten days after the team said he could have left. Hitler still believed he could win at this point and I am not convinced he would have left so early.
  • Secondly, I have seen the eye-witnesses, who stayed with Hitler until the end, talking about what they saw. At all times they stare straight into the camera and look to me as if they are telling the truth. Would they really have been duped by a double?
  • Thirdly, possible the only exception to the ‘honest stare’ is Traudl Junge, Hitler’s last private secretary. She always maintained she had not known about evil’s perpetrated about Hitler’s regime. In early interviews she looks honest and open. However, in 2002 she was interviewed for the film Blind Spot: Hitler’s Secretary, when she already knew she was dying of cancer. She admitted in this film that she finally had realised her own guilt but could not come to terms with it. She does avoid eye-contact with the camera and this could be guilt. Would somebody finally admit to feeling guilty but still not admit that Hitler had escaped (if he had) once she knew she had nothing to lose and everything to gain by telling the truth?
  • Finally, Franco and Hitler did not like each other. Franco wouldn’t do what Hitler wanted and thought the German Dictator irritating. Would Franco really have hidden Hitler in his personal retreat?

It’s worth remembering that just because Hitler could have escaped, doesn’t mean he did. I await the rest of the series with interest.

The Synchronicity Code

The Synchronicity Code cover

The Synchronicity Code cover

Just a quick note: you can find out more about me and the book in a new interview on the English Informer in France.

Big Lazlo Ferran Project coming in 2016
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Want to Meet the Author Lazlo Ferran?

The Synchronicity Code cover

The Synchronicity Code cover

The Synchronicity Code was out a week ago and to mark the occasion Rukia Publishing have done a Meet the Author page about me. You will find out a lot of new things about me and the book there! http://ow.ly/Ui1gL

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